Mumtaz N K
#Lovediaries #poattic-6
Week 1.
Sun’s my guardian star.
Nosegays and roseate bouquets —
Demeter and troth.
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Week 2.
Sun’s sliced by umber,
Phoebus- semicircles two,
Buds open to bloom.
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Week 3.
Amber streaked Phoebus
Branches slit into halves two
Soul’s disquiet yearnings.
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Week 4
Once sun tempers love,
The duirnal course, rise – fall
Earthy bated breathe.
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Week 5
The encircled sun,
A broken betrothal ring,
Dellusion, deceit.
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Week 6.
Sun’s shrouded in gloom
Redolent of coy bouquets,
Tears sweet and wilted.
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Week 7.
In darkness leave me,
In slumber’s deadly nightshade.
Strange thoughts brings the sun.
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Week 8.
Another listless dawn,
Mock not, Oh Sun! Moon’s my beau,
Now, I await none.
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Week 9.
A glaring sunbeam
Intrudes a teary-eyed blanket
Reminiscent of you.
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Week 10.
How blinding are Sun’s rays,
The interfering old fool!
Hold me, nightly bliss!
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Week 11.
An autumnal sun
Is my bosom chum, I shed
Despair and distress.
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Week 12.
Carpe Diem, I invite
For tea, the noisy sun, it
Flaps yesterday away.
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© Mumtaz N Khorakiwala
7-2-2021
Picture courtesy: Gemma Smeragliuolo
Unsplash.com
P.S.: Diary writing was an art practiced in the previous century. For the present generation with a busy and bustling life with a cauldron of bubbling social media, I thought Haiku would be the best way to express the delightful experience of falling in love, the grief that follows heartbreak and return to equilibrium.
I would really appreciate your feedback and comments.
1.Demeter: a well know perfume
2. Phoebus: the Sun God
Very beautiful! I loved the way you categorized them into different weeks to express the way love progresses.💚
Amazing, dear! Loved it 💚💚
Thank you Gowri & Pooja 💚💚!
This is a brillaint idea using Haikus to convey the different stages of the relationship. You are a Master of the written Word my dear. Marvel at your vocabulary and imagination.
This one is definitely going to be a winner.
Loved the way you have written it as a weekly diary note
Not to mention your awesome vocabulary and expression
Thank you Natasha and Pradnya for critiquing this piece, I guess it was an amazing experience for me too, there are several more pieces on #Sunseries saved for another day.
This is surely a masterpiece! Such a beautiful composition. Enjoyed how you’ve shown the different phases of a relationship 💚💚 everytime you write something, I conclude it with a ‘sigh’!
Thank you, I am humbled by your kind words ❤️ Nitika.
Brilliant work.. Loved hmthe vocabulary used… 💚💚💚💚
Amazing vocabulary and beautiful representation, the way you have managed to get the stages is brilliant.
Thank you Kirti and Anuradha for appreciating this piece. Its polishing has taken a great deal of time.
In fact I’ve felt the need for a retreat when writing recently, because there was something always interrupting my thought process. And I felt I was in a maze whilst trying to come back to the precise nuance.
Superb concept and beautiful poem Mumtaz
The language is exotic and presentation so thoughtful.
Very interesting read.
Thank you Itali. Loved your piece for its originality too.
This is a winner. Very eloquently done!!
Loved loved loved!!
Can I copy this poem (with your name of course) in my note book?
I would love to read it again and again?
Thank you so much Pallavi. Hahahaha. Sure, you can, you don’t need permission for that.💚💚
Exquisite creation, Mumtaz… Loved how you have portrayed the crests and troughs of love. Admire your poetry so much. <3
Thank you, Moonmoon Chowdhury.
Wow ! This is mesmerizing as good as you write always ! Am so much bowled over 🙂
Once again thank you for the appreciation.
Spell binding words. Added to my collection. Beautifully done!!
I’m speechless 💜💜💜
I think, this poem is a wonderful treat to the readers.Thank you for writing this poem💚💚💚
Thank you, Indrani, I deeply humbled💚.
Superb!!! How beautifully you have wriiten.. Ome of the best in this event..
Jaya, we catch up after a long time. Thank you so much dear.
Masterpiece 💚
Thank you Sonali